ext_98063 ([identity profile] joenotcharles.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] mousme 2005-08-19 06:24 am (UTC)

If I'm following that right, you're still putting the emphasis an TA instead of TOOED - which is not how "tattoed" is pronounced when you're reading it naturally! (If you DO pronounce tattooed that way when reading it naturally, just say so and I'll drop the whole thing.)

I don't mean to make a big deal out of this, but poetry (with rigid meter, like limericks) that has to be contorted by moving emphasis arond instead of being read naturally is a huge pet peeve of mine.

Another way to fix it would be "ta-TOOED were the / PRICE-es of ale", except that makes the grammar awkward.

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